Relationship's (poem's)
Relationships come in many forms, with every person you ever meet, theirs ones with the people you love, the people you hate, sometimes even random people you meet for a split second. Their are also those relationships you have that aren't real, like when you use personification to make doll's talk or when you take someone you've seen or made up to create a vivid fantasy in a world you can control, an example of a poem like that is "to a stranger" where the author make's up this life to share with a person they don't even know. Poems are the author perspective on various topics like relationships, determined through the reader on what it mean's.
In Relationships people have problems, some of the hardest relationships are the one teenagers have. Teen's will believe in many relationship's that people don't get them (ex. with parents), or that they are ugly, "how is your heart?" is a poem like that. The author explains the worst time of his life and how he never really had a stable relationship (until the end) with anyone because he's ugly and all relationship's are bad, he how ever is content with it well most teen's always fight to get there way.In high school, you throw together a bunch of hormonally unstable teens, so a lot of the time they start dating thinking they can handle sharing a relationship with someone how's love your not entitled to, how's love you have to fight to keep because there not just going to give it to you. People usually take love for granite when it seems entitled. "Unentitled" shows that love is a great thing that we have but we aren't entitled to anyone else's emotion because it's theirs to give and we are just lucky enough to be the recipient of them. We take this for granite because we have it for so long we don't even realize it's there until we lose it, which is why I like the quote "you don't know what you've got till it's gone" because once we lose that love we miss it more than ever and are going to fight to get it back, unless we didn't really care or lost the love over time.
Teen's don't really know what there doing, so I suggest you wait for collage at least. Because you will have a clearer image on life and how to handle your emotion's, thus how to handle your relationships because all important relation's your going to have your going to add some emotional attachment to so they become part of you a part you want forever or a part you want to forget, well that depends on the relationship.
It was really good i like they way you found a connection to each poem.
ReplyDeleteI loved your essay. I liked how you talked about different relationships. Also how you said teenagers don't know what their doing and its totally true and you should wait to collage:)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Ashleigh, maybe use some quotes to explain your idea.
ReplyDeleteEmma you have such interesting and unique thoughts on things. I appreciated your take on these poems. Even though it is a first draft, try to watch your technical writing as it slows the reader and confuses our ideas. You have missed a few simple things like capitals, "granite" instead of granted, and "college". Quality ideas need quality writing to shine their brightest. :)
ReplyDeleteyour response is one of my favourites, you included every and it was very welll structured good job :)
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